Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice.
From what I've tasted of desire
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great
And would suffice
Any comments would be great
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14-06-07, 09:51 PM #1
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comments please...
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14-06-07, 09:59 PM #2
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I like that thats really good different but good thanks
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14-06-07, 10:02 PM #3
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Thanks for your suggestion...I need more suggestions like you
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14-06-07, 10:05 PM #4
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I didn't suggest anything i just said it was good
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15-06-07, 12:27 AM #5
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It's better than the average poem that is posted in this forum...
Relax... I'll need some information first. Just the basic facts - can you show me where it hurts?
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15-06-07, 03:24 AM #6
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yea.
Originally Posted by vashti
i thought it was okay for a start.
a tip for anyone that reads this and writes poetry: don't do forced rhyming. it kills your poem.
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15-06-07, 03:40 AM #7
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i thought it was good.
the rhyme scheme was a little strange, but it was good.
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15-06-07, 04:33 AM #8
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I agree. The unusual nature of the rhyme scheme is what made it good. I generally don't care for rhyming poems. Originally Posted by Steve2004
Relax... I'll need some information first. Just the basic facts - can you show me where it hurts?
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15-06-07, 03:55 PM #9
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Huh, that is pretty good. Never realized how well the words desire and fire rhyme and go together.
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16-06-07, 05:26 PM #10
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How is it?
Mixing and matching,
Twisting and turning,
Hoping and praying,
Dreaming and considering,
Never knowing yet always knowing,
Wanting to, yet not wanting to,
Mixing my heart,
Matching my soul to yours,
Twisting fate with the flick of the wrist,
Turning my life over,
Hoping that it would end,
Praying that it never would stop,
Thinking it was over,
Wishing that it wasn't,
Dreaming of its coming,
Considering letting it steal within
Never knowing if it's true,
Always knowing that it's there.
Wanting to live in the light,
Not wanting the light to come,
The love of another
The dreams of someone close,
Remembering what you used to feel,
Can it come back if you pray so?
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17-06-07, 03:16 AM #11
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that was so cliche.
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17-06-07, 03:28 PM #12
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WOW that was REALLY good if only Robert Frost had been around to read your poetry he wouldn't have had to write it himself!!!
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18-06-07, 04:50 PM #13
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Thats good
Life is like a dick. When things get hard, **** it.
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