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  1. 31-07-04, 11:51 AM #1
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    Exclamation Innova, Zekk, Squirt, Illusional.. and anyone else that wants to read this..

    THIS NEEDS A TITLE! HELP! ROFL.. let me know..


    When life carries a burden,
    you try and hide behind,
    Come and find me..
    one chance to find.

    I am where the wind whispers
    Where the ski meets the sand
    Through the waves you can see me
    When the water meets the land.

    I am only one voice
    Between the land and sea
    Fear nothing... not me,
    when you stand in between.

    As the music plays softly
    with each lap and crash..
    You too will become smoke and amber and ash.

    For when the music stops swaying
    between that and this
    There is only one answer
    A surrendering bliss.
    Last edited by jane; 02-08-04 at 01:53 PM.
    "Remember always, that you not only have the right to be an individual, you have an obligation to be one."
    - - Eleanor Roosevelt
    " It's not who we are that holds us back, it's who we think we're not."
    - - Michael Nolan
    "...to love and lose, is better than not to love at all..." .... Lord, whats his name....
    " The world is big... I want to see all of it before it gets dark." -- John Muir
  2. 31-07-04, 06:55 PM #2
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    Wahoo~ Girl that was awesome, its been awhile for you! Must have some inspiration going on...
    everything happens for a reason...beginning to wonder why.
  3. 02-08-04, 01:52 PM #3
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    thanks Squirt.. got a title for me? ROFL.. I am feeling a little more inspired these days
    "Remember always, that you not only have the right to be an individual, you have an obligation to be one."
    - - Eleanor Roosevelt
    " It's not who we are that holds us back, it's who we think we're not."
    - - Michael Nolan
    "...to love and lose, is better than not to love at all..." .... Lord, whats his name....
    " The world is big... I want to see all of it before it gets dark." -- John Muir
  4. 02-08-04, 08:15 PM #4
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    how about..."one answer"?
    everything happens for a reason...beginning to wonder why.
  5. 03-08-04, 01:15 PM #5
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    i like it.. and its pretty much the whole truth.. however.. right now .. I believe love just is one answer... I like it.. nice touch squirt!
    "Remember always, that you not only have the right to be an individual, you have an obligation to be one."
    - - Eleanor Roosevelt
    " It's not who we are that holds us back, it's who we think we're not."
    - - Michael Nolan
    "...to love and lose, is better than not to love at all..." .... Lord, whats his name....
    " The world is big... I want to see all of it before it gets dark." -- John Muir
  6. 03-08-04, 09:44 PM #6
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    Wow Jane, I think thats your best one!

    Sorry I haven't been around, kinda busy again and my computer is unhooked at the moment.


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    i was going to say "one answer" or "surrendering bliss"

    its really great!!
    Cinderella said to Snow White
    "How does love get so off course
    All I wanted was a white knight
    With a good heart, soft touch, fast horse
    Ride me off into the sunset
    [URL=http://dizzygirl.net]Baby I'm forever yours[/URL]"
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    thank you for all the kind words.. .. Innova.. I miss ya man.

    I have to agree too Innova, this is my best one yet.. i have been working on another one.. but I am lacking the confidence of words right now.. oh well.. nothing wrong with a work in progress.. we shall see.. OH! .. and "Broken" .. think I have come up with some musical backing for it! get together with me online and I'll try and send you what I got so far!
    "Remember always, that you not only have the right to be an individual, you have an obligation to be one."
    - - Eleanor Roosevelt
    " It's not who we are that holds us back, it's who we think we're not."
    - - Michael Nolan
    "...to love and lose, is better than not to love at all..." .... Lord, whats his name....
    " The world is big... I want to see all of it before it gets dark." -- John Muir
  9. 04-08-04, 03:36 PM #9
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    Nice to see you write again Jane.
    Later on, your poems will make my heart go insane.
    So, what inspired you to write this way?
    maybe you can show me how to write and feel someday?

    Maybe I should give it a shot.
    To be or not to be?

    Is that the question?
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    Quote Originally Posted by jane
    thank you for all the kind words.. .. Innova.. I miss ya man.

    I have to agree too Innova, this is my best one yet.. i have been working on another one.. but I am lacking the confidence of words right now.. oh well.. nothing wrong with a work in progress.. we shall see.. OH! .. and "Broken" .. think I have come up with some musical backing for it! get together with me online and I'll try and send you what I got so far!
    0o0o0o0o! Really??

    Alrighty then, will do as soon as I can!

    Yeah, I miss talkin with ya too, I'll try to get the computer going before the week ends.


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    awesome poem Jane. Very deep.
  12. 07-08-04, 01:21 PM #12
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    Quote Originally Posted by Nice Lover Boy
    Nice to see you write again Jane.
    Later on, your poems will make my heart go insane.
    So, what inspired you to write this way?
    maybe you can show me how to write and feel someday?

    Maybe I should give it a shot.

    wow.. and thank you... um, could you explain that to me a little?
    Later on?
    The only thing that can inspire me to write are the feelings and words have no way to express.. and I def. think everyone should write...

    "Remember always, that you not only have the right to be an individual, you have an obligation to be one."
    - - Eleanor Roosevelt
    " It's not who we are that holds us back, it's who we think we're not."
    - - Michael Nolan
    "...to love and lose, is better than not to love at all..." .... Lord, whats his name....
    " The world is big... I want to see all of it before it gets dark." -- John Muir
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    Well, I wrote a funny one but I didn't get any responses.
    Oh well.
    To be or not to be?

    Is that the question?
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    actually.. i didnt really get that until you just said that.. sorry.. my bad, Im a little slow.. lol ..
    "Remember always, that you not only have the right to be an individual, you have an obligation to be one."
    - - Eleanor Roosevelt
    " It's not who we are that holds us back, it's who we think we're not."
    - - Michael Nolan
    "...to love and lose, is better than not to love at all..." .... Lord, whats his name....
    " The world is big... I want to see all of it before it gets dark." -- John Muir
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    I am reserecting( I know thats spelled WAY wrong... ) .. this because I still need a freakin title.. a friend wants to put it in his prelude for his new book.. I'll let you know when it comes out but from what i gather... this poem is the book.. beach.. love.. loss.. yadda yadda.. HELP! I still need a freakin title! ROFL
    "Remember always, that you not only have the right to be an individual, you have an obligation to be one."
    - - Eleanor Roosevelt
    " It's not who we are that holds us back, it's who we think we're not."
    - - Michael Nolan
    "...to love and lose, is better than not to love at all..." .... Lord, whats his name....
    " The world is big... I want to see all of it before it gets dark." -- John Muir
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